[Story] Recon 9

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w00t! And I didn't intend to be mean to you with that last comment ): I'll give you 5 free insults to use on me whenever you like

[hurter]

dude don't take it that seriosly (yes I don't know how to spell that)but anyways I guess you could forget that ever happened

[peanutbutter879]

to clickplaynow:why do you keep posting that ad

[hurter]

umm....wheres skylord?

[Zachary0015]

(09-05-2010 01:14 AM)peanutbutter879 schrieb:  to clickplaynow:why do you keep posting that ad

LOL. It's not an ad, it's a signature.

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yeah, thats my sig. I keep it there to get people to go to my suggestion... hehe

[Zachary0015]

Speaking of sigs, I really need a new one.

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why don't you just resize your old one? oh I know! I'll make you a new one. But look on the writers forum, skylord doesn't need this spam

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/bump. Where have you been all this time? I want a story :(

[hurter]

skylord where are you (chant!) we want a new chapter we want a new chapter we want a new chapter we want a new chapter

[[tK]-D!CE]

(F)Ashy-man you told me too reply so I did and I will post another story in a moments time......

[[tK]-D!CE]

Ok, Chapter 1 part 2.
The general walks in the door "Aren't you suppose to be traning maggots!?" He yells, Goocharoonie turns around as fast as he could and salutes, so does Private-ll, "Y-Yes sir we were just gettin' ready for the simulator" Splatters Goocharoonie, a little commando appears from behind the general, "This is you train-y, ashyman!" Spat the general. "Hi guys" he says cheerfully. Private-ll gives a slight wave to him. They walk into the simulator they each go into a room Private-ll first walks into his 'Simulator' There was a cliff and a rocky terrian underneath it Private-ll thought that the cliff would be a good sniping spot, he turned invisable and crept towards the cliff with his sniper out he could see lots of targets running 'round wild. He aimed carfully at the target with a big crown on it, then... BAM!! the 'crowned target' was now headless as it fell to the ground, Private-ll could here somethings running upto the cliff he grabbed his knife and looked back, O-oh targets were charging at him about to knock him off the cliff, Private-ll knifed (FTW!!) left to right rippin' everything to shreads then at last the last target remained it had a wooden sword, with a blue type of realy thick blue cardboard Private-ll thought to himself 'If i can tripp it maybe I can stab it in the back' so he stuck to his thought the last target charged at him, he jumped to the left then grabbed it leg tugged it back and stabbed it until it was only ripped carboard. Private-ll was releived when he finished and he hoped to do a mission like that or try the simulator again he loved the rush flowing thorughout his body. The door was now unlocked, so he walked into back into reality, "how was it Private?" said the general calmly, "Great!" he said back exsausted, Private-ll took a deep breath and walked towards his room.
Chaper 1 part 2 will be comin' out this friday!! Goocharoonies 'Simulator'
Then the Chapter 1 part 3 will be coming out next week!! ashymans 'Simulator
Then the Chapter 2 will be about the difficult 'Mission' Private-ll, Goocharoonie and ashyman have to face!!. Until then.... Um I don't know what to say after this well..... SKYLORD9 out....

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Still needs a bit of improvement. You have a lot of run on sentences and grammar mistakes but the story you're trying to put out is great. If you want, I can be a co writer and fix up some of your chapters and stick to your plot line.

[[tK]-D!CE]

Yes please. Yea ^^ I'm a realy bad speller btw I had to go to bed in like 30 mins so I had to rush. So... meh but I would like u too be ma co-writer

[hurter]

how come my guys is a wuss (not ashyman goocharoonie)

[hurter]

since my story all hands on guns is basicly a sinking ship I want to get off it and take a new one so im making a new story (called mexican frontlines hope u guys can read it! )

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I'm pleased that you accepted my offer, skylord. I can start rewriting some chapters today. I'll give them to you in pm's then you can copy+paste them into the edited post when you get it. I might not start today though, so no promises

[Zachary0015]

(14-05-2010 08:02 AM)hurter schrieb:  since my story all hands on guns is basicly a sinking ship I want to get off it and take a new one so im making a new story (called mexican frontlines hope u guys can read it! )

lol Advertissment spam. XD

[hurter]

lol yea guess so but.......can't think of excuse but could ppl still read though (and nice chaptor buddy )